The eye-witness
Part 1
by
Robert L. Fielding
Students - read the first part of this story and then answer the questions at the end.
Part 1
by
Robert L. Fielding
Students - read the first part of this story and then answer the questions at the end.
September 25th, 2006
Annie was playing the piano. Her mother was in the kitchen making dinner. It was 5.30 in the afternoon and most of the kids were still outside.
Annie continued to play her piano. She was trying to play a tune her music teacher had taught her. She was concentrating and looking at the music on the sheet in front of her.
Annie turned her head towards the open window. It was just beginning to go dark and the kids were going home to for dinner. Annie was an only child – she didn’t have any brothers or sisters.
She stopped playing the piano. She thought she heard her mother’s voice.
“Mummy,” she shouted.“ Are you OK?”
There was no reply.
“She must be cooking,” Annie thought, and looked back at the music. She began to play again.
Gill, Annie’s mother, was in the kitchen preparing a salad. She liked to hear her daughter play the piano as she worked.
“Those piano lessons are expensive,” she thought, “but they are worth it. Annie is improving. She has talent, she can play tunes easily and she learns very quickly, and she’s only 11 years old.” Gill smiled to herself. She was proud of her clever daughter.
Dinner was nearly ready. Gill opened the oven door to look at the chicken roasting gently. It was nearly done. She knew Annie would be hungry. She was hungry too.
The music stopped. The house was suddenly very quiet.
“Annie,” shouted her mother. “Dinner’s ready. Stop playing now, let’s eat,” then she added, “But wash your hands first, please.”
There was still no sound. Gill moved towards the kitchen door.
“I thought she said she was hungry.” she said to herself quietly.
As she opened the kitchen door, she heard her daughter crying out.
“Mummy, they’re hurting me!”
Gill rushed into the lounge. Annie wasn’t there. The front door was wide open. Annie’s sheets of music were lying on the garden path outside. Annie had disappeared.
Q1. What could have happened to Annie?
Q2. Where could she be?
Q3. Who could have taken her?
Q4. Will she be OK?
Write and let me know what you think are the answers to these questions.
Send your answers in a short paragraph to http://www.nicenet.org/
Robert L. Fielding
Annie was playing the piano. Her mother was in the kitchen making dinner. It was 5.30 in the afternoon and most of the kids were still outside.
Annie continued to play her piano. She was trying to play a tune her music teacher had taught her. She was concentrating and looking at the music on the sheet in front of her.
Annie turned her head towards the open window. It was just beginning to go dark and the kids were going home to for dinner. Annie was an only child – she didn’t have any brothers or sisters.
She stopped playing the piano. She thought she heard her mother’s voice.
“Mummy,” she shouted.“ Are you OK?”
There was no reply.
“She must be cooking,” Annie thought, and looked back at the music. She began to play again.
Gill, Annie’s mother, was in the kitchen preparing a salad. She liked to hear her daughter play the piano as she worked.
“Those piano lessons are expensive,” she thought, “but they are worth it. Annie is improving. She has talent, she can play tunes easily and she learns very quickly, and she’s only 11 years old.” Gill smiled to herself. She was proud of her clever daughter.
Dinner was nearly ready. Gill opened the oven door to look at the chicken roasting gently. It was nearly done. She knew Annie would be hungry. She was hungry too.
The music stopped. The house was suddenly very quiet.
“Annie,” shouted her mother. “Dinner’s ready. Stop playing now, let’s eat,” then she added, “But wash your hands first, please.”
There was still no sound. Gill moved towards the kitchen door.
“I thought she said she was hungry.” she said to herself quietly.
As she opened the kitchen door, she heard her daughter crying out.
“Mummy, they’re hurting me!”
Gill rushed into the lounge. Annie wasn’t there. The front door was wide open. Annie’s sheets of music were lying on the garden path outside. Annie had disappeared.
Q1. What could have happened to Annie?
Q2. Where could she be?
Q3. Who could have taken her?
Q4. Will she be OK?
Write and let me know what you think are the answers to these questions.
Send your answers in a short paragraph to http://www.nicenet.org/
Robert L. Fielding
Here are several of my students’ versions of what happens next in the story. They are all excellent, aren’t they? Robert L. Fielding
Version 1
Gill ran toward the front door, she looked out to search for her daughter, but sadly she didn't find Annie. At this moment, Gill mind's was full of thoughts and questions. "Where is my daughter, what will happen to her, is she ok?" Suddenly, while Gill was thinking, she heard a nice sound coming from the garden. "This is Annie's sound "; she said to herself, and she ran quickly to the source of the sound. Gill was very surprised when she found her daughter sitting with a group of children singing and laughing. "What are you doing here Annie?" The mother said. Annie replied: "Don't worry Mum, I'm Ok, when I was playing piano I saw these children playing football in the garden, by mistake, they kicked the ball toward my window, my papers fell down then I shouted to you. Then I went out to see what happened and who did that. I found these children playing; they asked me to excuse them and asked me to sing for them." Gill smiled and said "Don't go out without telling me, Annie"
Gill ran toward the front door, she looked out to search for her daughter, but sadly she didn't find Annie. At this moment, Gill mind's was full of thoughts and questions. "Where is my daughter, what will happen to her, is she ok?" Suddenly, while Gill was thinking, she heard a nice sound coming from the garden. "This is Annie's sound "; she said to herself, and she ran quickly to the source of the sound. Gill was very surprised when she found her daughter sitting with a group of children singing and laughing. "What are you doing here Annie?" The mother said. Annie replied: "Don't worry Mum, I'm Ok, when I was playing piano I saw these children playing football in the garden, by mistake, they kicked the ball toward my window, my papers fell down then I shouted to you. Then I went out to see what happened and who did that. I found these children playing; they asked me to excuse them and asked me to sing for them." Gill smiled and said "Don't go out without telling me, Annie"
Version 2
There was a man in the town, his name was Michael, and he loved to hear music so much. But he searched for a person who played piano. So he sent his followers to look for a good pianist. They wore normal clothes like other people. One of them heard the sound of Annie's piano and it was nice. So he stopped near her window and wished it was open and he saw her nice piano. He was attracted to this beautiful piano. So she decided to go to him, and when she went to him he carried her away. But she heard him. After that he put her hand on her mouth and put her in the car. He carried her to his big boss. When his big boss saw her, he requested from her to play piano, when she refused that he requested from his followers to carry her to a special room. When she was alone, she felt sad, so she began to play piano. The big boss heard her playing and admired her. So he decided to be one of his followers. On the other hand her, mother started search for her, but she was disappointed. She told the police. Then they helped her. And when they found the big boss and his followers, they fought them and beat them. So, the mother saw her daughter. When police asked the big boss why he had kidnapped the person who played a piano, he told him that he loved it and loved music so much. But Annie loved this man because he loved music. So she said to the policeman that she want to come to him every night, play piano for him and eat dinner with him. Her mother agreed and the big boss swore to take care of her.
There was a man in the town, his name was Michael, and he loved to hear music so much. But he searched for a person who played piano. So he sent his followers to look for a good pianist. They wore normal clothes like other people. One of them heard the sound of Annie's piano and it was nice. So he stopped near her window and wished it was open and he saw her nice piano. He was attracted to this beautiful piano. So she decided to go to him, and when she went to him he carried her away. But she heard him. After that he put her hand on her mouth and put her in the car. He carried her to his big boss. When his big boss saw her, he requested from her to play piano, when she refused that he requested from his followers to carry her to a special room. When she was alone, she felt sad, so she began to play piano. The big boss heard her playing and admired her. So he decided to be one of his followers. On the other hand her, mother started search for her, but she was disappointed. She told the police. Then they helped her. And when they found the big boss and his followers, they fought them and beat them. So, the mother saw her daughter. When police asked the big boss why he had kidnapped the person who played a piano, he told him that he loved it and loved music so much. But Annie loved this man because he loved music. So she said to the policeman that she want to come to him every night, play piano for him and eat dinner with him. Her mother agreed and the big boss swore to take care of her.
Version 3
Annie was kidnapped by some bad men who hate her family. She might be in a very dark place underground, outide the town. I don't think she will be OK.
Version 4
Her mother worried about her daughter. She shouted everywhere, but she didn't hear her voice.
"Annie had disappeared, yes that is it."
The story began now. Annie heard someone calling her name, she followed the voice and suddenly someone bit her that why she said, "Mummy, they're hurting me!". She couldn't see them but she heard them. She reached a dark place then suddenly she saw a young boy with blue eyes and brown hair. She asked him "Who are you? Where do you come from? Why did you bite me? ". He said, "My name is Raul, I am from a charmed world and for the last question he laughed". Annie was afraid when she heard that, she began to cry. He stopped her and did some funny things then she stopped. After half an hour he showed her an amazing place then he told her a secret between them. After two hour, she returned to her home. Her mother hugged and kissed her, she told her mother the story and she let Raul live with them.
Version 5
The mother was afraid that something bad happened to her daughter so she ran outside the garden into the street looking for her but she found a clay in the ground and decided to follow it.
The clay lead her mother to a deserted garage where she found Annie covered with the clay and she was with a small cat. Gill was happy and felt relief to find Annie, and went back home.
On the way back, Annie told her mother that she heard the cat screaming outside, in front of the house because some rough boys were throwing the clay on it and when she tried to help it they started throwing the clay at her and this hurt her and that was why she screamed, asking her mother for help but she followed them to help the cat then her mother found her in the garage.
The mother was afraid that something bad happened to her daughter so she ran outside the garden into the street looking for her but she found a clay in the ground and decided to follow it.
The clay lead her mother to a deserted garage where she found Annie covered with the clay and she was with a small cat. Gill was happy and felt relief to find Annie, and went back home.
On the way back, Annie told her mother that she heard the cat screaming outside, in front of the house because some rough boys were throwing the clay on it and when she tried to help it they started throwing the clay at her and this hurt her and that was why she screamed, asking her mother for help but she followed them to help the cat then her mother found her in the garage.
Version 6
The mother was afraid. She didn't no where her daughter was or even what had happened to her. She felt nervous and she didn't know what to do. She asked herself if she should call the police to look for her daughter or should she look for her by herself. After that, the mother decided to look for her daughter by herself. She went out and she started looking for Annie in the street. At sunset, she saw Annie coming from the end of the street with two kids. They were laughing and talking together as friends. The mother was very happy to see her daughter again, so she ran and enfolded Annie strongly. The two kids were wondering what they were seeing. Annie told her mother that she was OK. She said to her mother that while she was playing the piano, the two kids came in and asked her to go with them. When they saw that Annie didn't want to go with them they pushed her out and that was why she shouted "Mummy, they're hurting me!" . One of the kids caught Annie's hand trying to lead her outside and the other kid gathered the music sheets and followed them. Because they were running, some of the sheets fell down and that's why the mother saw Annie's sheets of music lying on the garden path outside. The two kids took Annie to a smal old house. After they went in, Annie saw an old piano. The two kids told Annie that it was their house, and the piano was for their granny. Also they told her that their granny was too sick, so she couldn't play the piano any more and that's way they had brought Annie to their home. Annie felt comfortable and she decided to play the piano for the sick granny. The two kids were happy to hear that. They took her to their granny's room. She was very happy to see the granny and the granny was happy too. The granny told Annie that she would be very glad if she played the piano for her. So one of the kids gave Annie her music sheets and they all sat around the piano then Annie started playing her favorite tune. The granny was very happy to hear the music again and she forgot her sickness. They all had a nice time. Gill was proud of her daughter after she heard the story and she hoped she was with them.
Version 7
Annie went to the garden when she heard a sound in it. Then she saw a cat in the middle of the street and it was coming very fast, so she screamed and ran to the cat to save it. After that, the car hit Annie very hard but the cat was unhurt. Annie can't survivde the concussion and died. Gill went out to search for her daughter, and when she saw Annie in the middle of the street, she ran to her and cried. She hoped that Annie would survive but she didn't. Finally, Annie became famous and her pictures were spread all over the newspapers, with the headline,
"SHE PAID HER LIFE FOR A CAT."
MANY THANKS TO MY GREAT STUDENTS FOR WRITING THESE CREATIVE ENDINGS TO MY STORY.
Now that you've read these excellent versions written by my best students, read the next episode - http://storiesforstudents.blogspot.com/2008/09/part-two-witness-to-what.html
Robert L. Fielding
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